A brief garden poem. Do you like it?

Hollyhocks





The tall, disdainful hollyhocks


parade their looks in silken socks


and limited-edition Versace frocks.


They thrust their hips in arrogant dance


beside the battered fence.





Beneath their feet, small and neat


Sweet Williams flutter with delight


Courtiers to these catwalk queens.


They stare open-mouthed


at each blatant scene.


Outrageous, flaunted beauty


paraded for all to see.


No shy approach, no modesty.





I cannot stand this ‘in-your-face’


For me, demure is no disgrace.


So, I know, I’d choose Sweet William


to keep company with me.

A brief garden poem. Do you like it?
Ah, Jessica P, what shall we do with her. I found this a lovely, lovely image of a garden romance, and also of a woman's heart. It does not matter what she is on the outside, tall, beautiful, renowned and in the eye of the world, in the end, I do believe that she would rather keep company with Sweet William as well as you. I begin to think that the hollyhocks are rather pretentious flowers, and I love the way your poetry combines elements of both earth and air. One giving meaning to the other, and the other translating into the one. Simply astounding.
Reply:its okay..some of the rhymes sounded slightly forced...just personally i dislike the amount of superflous words that were there to rhyme and keep the rhythm going...i think that it was a bit melodramatic as well..
Reply:Oh, I love this Granny Jill!





Two of my favorite flowers of all time, portrayed beautifully in this poem....what's not to like?!








Bayard Lady: I am very impressed! I can't even put my shoes on the right feet before coffee and you wrote a wonderful poem!
Reply:Yes, I like it!





My Silver Lace won't stay in place


apparently they choose a race


to see who'll occupy the space.


Curling, whirling twisted stems


ofttimes they'll touch your hem!





Note: All this before coffee!
Reply:Wow. I'm no poetry critic (although I do have a master's degree in English), but I LOVED it. I really did.
Reply:I'd prefer "coyness" instead of "shy approach".





I love the figurative languages being used. It makes the poem very vivid, visible.
Reply:If you are going to give us a lecture of garden plants then at least be kind enough to include a plant dictionary! lol Another delightful offering. Don't be hard on Sweet William when you snip him!
Reply:It's okay GJ, I think your poem is lovely! I have seen such talent in you and admire you greatly. You and Amy and Robert, Bayard Lady and several others that I know of but can't recall their names have inspired me very much here. I do enjoy your poetry and that's not just for the 10 points. I honestly do enjoy you. You don't even have to pick me. In fact, don't. Choose someone else, I just wanted to give you a complement.

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